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The Deadly Force

October 11th, 2009

Joanne Laurent    He waited quietly behind the door, expecting it to bust open any minute. He braced himself.

  

    Armed with exceptional technological and customer service skills, the anticipation of being flooded with customers was almost overwhelming. But as the hours ticked by uneventfully, the door never opened. The advertising campaign that he had put so much money into had bombed out. 

 

     I recently saw a sign for a repair and maintenance business with the motto, “Creating clients for life.” I’m sure the slogan was a testament to customer service and satisfaction so superior that lifetime business relationships based on trust was the intended outcome. But the words created a much different image in my mind. The first thing that popped into my head was, “Creating problems for life.” I envisioned the need to continually fork over more and more cash to solve the recurring problems that would result from using this repair service.

 

    People interpret the meaning of language based on social upbringing, culture, and their past experiences. My own past experiences with this particular line of service providers had been unproductive and expensive—the problems never being fully resolved. Therefore, the thought of this business turning me into a client for life was unacceptable. I wanted someone who would not be needed again after the service call. The slogan that was intended to generate trust and security, instead created a negative connotation.

 

     Words can create powerful images that are completely unrelated to the message we are trying to relay. When choosing our words we must use utmost caution because they often discharge with a deadly force.   

 

Joanne

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Writing to Sell: the importance of delivering on your promises

September 22nd, 2009

The Writer

The Writer

I was delighted when I went to my mailbox and found advertising! Although personal cards and letters stuffed with money is what I really wanted, I was grateful that no bills arrived today. I eagerly opened the obvious sales letter because, hey, at least somebody thought to write to me.

 

The sales letter came from a marketing firm offering to solve all my problems. Halleluiah! The only reason I read through to the end of the first boring, lengthy, convoluted sentence was because my job depends on reading and analyzing sales letters. In this letter, one single, opening sentence attempted to address all of the following issues:

  •    My membership affiliation
  •    Helping my business (didn’t say how it would help-just that it would)
  •    Access to a collection of mysterious reports for which no value to me had been established
  •    A cost savings option that allowed me to purchase only relevant portions of these mysterious reports

So now, of course, I’m sitting at the edge of my seat. My excitement is building as I read on… “If your answer is Yes…” to wanting whatever the heck it was they attempted to describe in the first sentence, they’re actually going to make it “affordable” for me to get it. Wow! How cool is that? I’ll actually be able to afford something that I don’t yet have any idea what it is, how it’s used, or why I might want it.

 

The next line of the letter began with the bold print heading -Special Offer to all Members-. It said I could receive 60% off the subscription rate and pay only $3,000! What a deal.

 

What’s Wrong With That?  

The problem with this letter is that it delivered something entirely different from what was promised. Besides neglecting to provide any benefits whatsoever to promote a desire for the product, every sentence in this letter focused on “low cost” and “affordability.” It implied that small, independent business owners were the target audience.

 

If you plan to set your readers up in anticipation of a low cost product and then hit them with a $3,000 price tag, you’d better be selling condos or nice cars. Otherwise, they won’t trust you.

 

   Call me for help with your next sales letter   and your customers will trust you.

How to Get People to Read Your Stuff

September 19th, 2009

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Information overload is at an all-time high. We crave knowledge, and at the same time, cringe at the thought of reading one more piece of literature. Our inboxes are bombarded with written lures that plead, “Open me!” Sales letters, website content, and blogs fly past us so fast we can’t possibly read all that is placed before us.

            

What do Readers Want?

 

·        They want you to make decision-making easy for them by providing clear, concise, accurate information.

 

·        They want relevant data to be accessible at a glance.

 

·        They want clear headings, short paragraphs, and skim-able text.

 

·        They want well-constructed sentences that are easy to understand.

 

·        They want you to directly ask for the sale and make it easy for them to buy.

 

        I provide personalized, quality writing service that helps customers realize you are the one selling exactly what they want. Why waste money on ineffective copy when you can call deScribe It! to turn words into cash?